meadow of sun-drenched smiles
meadow of sun-drenched smiles
estefaaano_writes
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I gazed into the earth
Observed every fault line.
How long did I stand in the garden?
I gazed into your eyes
Your hands in mine
And the stars chanting our name.
Beneath the champagne-colored skies,
We lie in the soil
Weeks to the ground below.
Wide-eyed wonder,
Looking out into the moonlight.
See how flowers grow,
Beneath the place your head once lay,
They're crying for you still.
All he wanted was home.
Just the two of us,
As I sit here alone,
Left to find myselfā
Ridding of all that I had known.
How the time flies,
Spending life times.
Time passes on,
See how they strayed from the path.
When the sins of the fatherā
Are the sins of the son.
When your name and decay,
Unify.
Your bridges burnt out,
The trees never grew out.
You've made yourself drown with,
No one to pull you out.
Carnage on my tongue,
Petal-veined devourer.
Grief has made me blind,
Cruel, quick, hungry,
Who could blame?
Let my spirit flow to the sea,
Let it go,
And let it be.
This hit me right in the feels. The line "Ridding of all that I had known" is so powerful.
ReplyDeleteThe way you use nature imagery is just chef's kiss. "Petal-veined devourer"?! Genius! This poem is a masterpiece.
ReplyDeleteThe title is so ironic considering the content of the poem, and I love that. The contrast between the "sun-drenched smiles" and the pain you describe is so effective.
ReplyDeleteEstefaaano, this is SO beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time!
ReplyDeleteI'm not crying, you're crying!
ReplyDeleteI'm going to have to reread it a few times to fully unpack it all.
ReplyDeleteI'm learning so much from your writing style, estefaaano_writes.
ReplyDeleteThe way you use metaphors and imagery is brilliant.
Thank you for sharing your craft with us. š
Another incredible poem from estefaaano_writes! You never disappoint. Can't wait to see what you write next!
ReplyDeleteI'd love to see this poem in a collection! Your writing is so captivating.
ReplyDeleteDo you have any books published?
Girl we tried and tried but I guess he's not yet ready for publishing physical books.
DeleteBut he has tons of poem collections!
You can find it all here.
Really?
DeleteI have to read them all then.
Thanks !
One of a kind!
ReplyDeleteYou wear your heart on your sleeve in your poetry, and that's what makes it so special.
I've been following your work for a while now, and I'm always impressed. You have a unique voice and a special gift for storytelling. š¤ļø
ReplyDelete"Meadow of Sun-Drenched Smiles" is going straight to the top of my list of your best works.
ReplyDeleteI'm already anticipating your next creation with bated breath!
I'm officially obsessed with this poem! I've read it at least ten times already, and I'm still discovering new layers of meaning. Your writing is so intricate and beautiful. I'm already counting down the days until your next release!
ReplyDeletePOETIC GENIUS!
ReplyDeleteI'm your biggest superfan, Estefaaano! And this poem just solidifies that.
ReplyDeleteAll he wanted was home.š„
ReplyDeleteestefaaano_writes, you're a poetic prodigy!
ReplyDeleteAs a lover of all things literary, I'm so impressed by your work, estefaaano_writes.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is a masterpiece.
I'm so inspired by your writing, estefaaano_writes.
ReplyDeleteYour poems make me think, they make me feel, and they make me want to write more myself. ā¤ļøāš„
I'm a constant reader of your work, estefaaano_writes, and I'm always impressed. Everything is chef's kiss!
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your talent with us!
(mentor us please)
estefaaano_writes, your poetry transcends language barriers.
ReplyDeleteEven though English isn't my first language, I can feel the emotion in every word. This poem is beautiful and heartbreaking. Thank you for this.
Estefaaano, your poetry reminds me of the classics, yet it feels so fresh and modern. Keep it coming please š„ŗšš»
ReplyDeleteI'm a young poet myself, and I look up to you. ā
ReplyDeleteThe way you use imagery and metaphor is just very incredible. This poem has given me so many ideas for my own writing.
estefaaano_writes, your poetry reminds me that everyone has a story to tell, regardless of their circumstances.
ReplyDeleteAs a disabled writer, I appreciate your inclusive and empathetic voice. This poem is beautiful and moving.
Estefaaano, as an immigrant, I understand the feeling of being uprooted and having to rebuild your life. The lines about "ridding of all that I had known" really resonated with me.
ReplyDeleteThank you for giving voice to these experiences.
your poetry reminds me that love and loss are universal experiences that we all share, regardless of age.
ReplyDeletePOETIC PRODIGY!
ReplyDeleteThe imagery of the flowers growing where the head once lay is so poignant and powerful!!!
ReplyDeleteReminding us that even in loss, there is life and renewal.