unbound
Unbound
estefaaano_writes
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I held your absence like water in cupped hands,
atoms that once belonged to us both
now seeping through fingers.
I let them go.
By shallow pools where your words gather,
I stand naked in my observance,
refusing the intoxication of memory's scent.
What is odorless cannot haunt.
My voice,
A tremor that breaks against mountain walls,
returns to me across oceans
without your echo.
Is it freedom I taste, or just destruction?
Temples reduced to sand, forests to stumps.
But see how green persists,
how it climbs through wreckage.
The heart is not heavy, it is vast.
I contain what you never saw:
deserts and plains,
worker and aristocrat,
slave and master;
multitudes you never touched.
Your embrace was merely a station
in the endless procession of becoming.
Death laughs at our goodbyes.
What dies gives birth.
If you search for me, look beneath your soles,
in dirt where I've become something elemental.
You may not recognize what I mean now,
but I will filter through your blood anyway,
a different nourishment.
I wait, but not forever.
The universe flows on, indifferent
to the moment we severed,
untranslatable and untamed.
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I canāt get over the line about becoming "something elemental."
ReplyDeleteItās such a powerful message that even when we feel lost, weāre still part of something bigger.
I love how you tackled the idea that death can lead to new life. Itās a comforting thought, especially when weāre grieving.
ReplyDeleteGenius!
ReplyDeletemade me reflect on my own relationships and how they shape who I am
ReplyDeleteItās so easy to get lost in the past, but your poem encourages me to find strength in moving forward.
ReplyDelete"What is odorless cannot haunt." That's such a clever way of thinking about moving on from memories.
ReplyDeleteyet another, a masterpiece that leaves you with a lot to think about.
ReplyDeleteThe poem grapples beautifully with the paradox of loss and transformation.
ReplyDelete"absence like water in cupped hands" is so visceral and sad
ReplyDeleteI think anyone who's experienced a significant loss can connect with that feeling of something precious slipping away.
Delete"'Unbound' ā the title itself feels significant in the context of the poem. It speaks to a breaking free, but also perhaps a sense of being untethered.
ReplyDeleteunexpectedly irresistible.
ReplyDeleteThe idea of becoming something elemental and filtering through blood is a unique and powerful way to think about legacy and the enduring impact of relationships, even after they end.
ReplyDeleteThis one makes me think of a specific relationship I went through. The feeling of your voice returning without an echo is so spot on. It's like the space where that person used to be is just...empty. š«
ReplyDeleteI like the way the poem flows.
ReplyDeleteIt feels very organic.
There's a raw honesty in this poem, especially in the question, "Is it freedom I taste, or just destruction?" It acknowledges the complexity of moving on and the potential for both liberation and pain. I'll read it again.
ReplyDeleteIt's interesting how the poem acknowledges the end of something without dwelling solely on the sadness.
ReplyDeleteThe line about death laughing at goodbyes feels very matter-of-fact, almost a realistic acceptance of life's cycles!
ReplyDeleteCool
ReplyDeleteI love this writer so much! Grabe, genius!!!
ReplyDeleteI love how the movement from focusing on the "YOU" to the vastness of the "I" is really powerful and super inspiring. š©·
I like that the poem doesn't offer easy answers.
ReplyDeleteyes! it leaves room for interpretation and personal reflection.
DeleteThe idea that an embrace is just a (station) is a perspective I haven't considered before.
ReplyDeleteReading this aloud, there's a definite rhythm to the language. This piece is well-written.
ReplyDeleteThe line breaks and varying sentence lengths contribute to the overall impact. I will never get tired of reading your workd estefaaano_writes!
there's vulnerability in the speaker's voice that makes the poem feel very authentic.
ReplyDeletesharing such raw emotions takes courage.
This one touches on the indifference of the universe to personal moments.
ReplyDeletethe symbolism here is quite rich, very impressive.
ReplyDeletewhen you're going through something intense, it can feel jarring how the world just keeps turning
ReplyDeleteyou can sense the speaker moving through different stages of grief
ReplyDeleteI love that despite the poetic language, there's a directness to some of the lines.
ReplyDeleteLike "I let them go" and "Death laughs at our goodbyes," that cuts through and just feels very impactful.
the poem reveals a lot about the speaker's internal state, but it also makes you think about the person who is now absent.
ReplyDeleteThe final word, "UNTAMED," is very interesting. After all the reflection on loss and transformation, it ends with a sense of wildness and perhaps a refusal to be fully defined by the past relationship
ReplyDeleteIt doesn't feel overly dramatic, but the emotions conveyed are deep and resonant.
ReplyDeleteMORE PLEASE!
ReplyDeleteThis piece doesn't necessarily offer a neat resolution, but there's a sense of closure in the speaker's acceptance of the separation and their focus on their own journey forward.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate that the poem avoids being overly sentimental. It confronts the pain of loss in a raw and honest way without resorting to clichƩs.
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ReplyDeletewow! that feeling of your voice returning without the familiar echo of the other person is so poignant
ReplyDeleteyou can literally trace a clear emotional arc in the poem.
ReplyDeletemoving from the immediate feeling of loss to a more reflective and ultimately forward-looking perspective.
Hmph. Another breakup poem. Still, that 'odorless cannot haunt' line is kinda clever. Wish I'd thought of that during my last disaster.
ReplyDeleteSo, the person turned into dirt?
ReplyDeleteWe return to the earth, we nourish what comes after.
ReplyDeletegotta admit, (Death laughs at our goodbyes) has a certain dark humor to it. Truth.
ReplyDeletehmm so, you're saying you're going to haunt them from inside their own bloodstream?
ReplyDeletePassive-aggressive much?
I dig it.
stirs the mind.
ReplyDeleteliterally
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ReplyDeleteI have to read it 3 times, to understand it.
ReplyDeletebut I think I have to do it again hahaha
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ReplyDeleteserene
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